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if the Sky...... by ~Gi-sa95:iconGi-sa95:

Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Open


If the sky fell would it be in pieces or raindrops?
If it was raindrops is it crying because of happiness or sadness?
If it was happy why not have it sunny why cloudy?
If it was Sunny would it mean it was a good day or feeling revealed?
If it felt revealed is it broken or found out?
Finally if it was broken did it fall apart?
©2009 ~Gi-sa95
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Author's Comments

I thought up all this in a matter of seconds. It was inspired by something I said to my friend I really don't like this piece but it is something.

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~Captainkoala-7 Feb 5, 2009, 9:41:00 PM
Wow...this is actually a really, really good thought. It would be absolutely amazing if you added a little bit of punctuation to accentuate your points, but it's really, really great.

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~Gi-sa95 Feb 5, 2009, 9:43:00 PM
Thanks I'm glad you think that I actually just revised it because I found a mistake. If you like that you might want to read my other poems. Personally I think they are better but you can decided. Once again though thanks for comment :D

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!MellyBURSTOFbayum Feb 6, 2009, 12:34:22 PM
I loved how you made it a cycle, it's all like
"WOOO I RULEZ~!"

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~Gi-sa95 Feb 6, 2009, 12:39:07 PM
Glad you noticed I actually had to rearrange words to do that. I love cycle poems.

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!MellyBURSTOFbayum Feb 6, 2009, 12:40:09 PM
Yesshh

I should probably try that xD


If you don't mind,

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~Gi-sa95 Feb 6, 2009, 12:44:17 PM
Make a cycle poem? yeah sure it is not I created the idea of them, but if you mention anything about the sky falling at least mention me in the artist comments lol. I mean that more joky than it may turn out to be. I'm really happy your liking It. Believe it or not when I first made this I though it was piece of shit. I disliked it but I wanted to see what other would think. and I'm wowed by the reaction


Sorry about rambling

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!MellyBURSTOFbayum Feb 6, 2009, 3:31:23 PM
LOL


You should hear me rambling.

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Roses are red, Violets are blue, sugar is sweet, and so are-Oh fuck this.
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~Gi-sa95 Feb 6, 2009, 9:11:16 PM
:heart: love to hear others ramble.

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!MellyBURSTOFbayum Feb 6, 2009, 9:12:14 PM
Trust me, once you've hear my ramble, you wouldn't want to listen to another ramble again.

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Roses are red, Violets are blue, sugar is sweet, and so are-Oh fuck this.
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